O baby doll!! "Can any one save me now
Please reach out a hand" I AM HERE!!! IM THAT HAND U R LOOKING FOR!! IM HERE...NEVER FORGET THAT!!!i truly loved this poem! 101% talent in ur painful words!! stay strong beautiful!
i love u so muhc

Great job in writing this one! 5/5 Keep up the good work!

-Stephanie-

Hey, this is a really good poem, i can relate, and i think the ending is just fine as it is. The rhyme was good too.
love .
.molly.

I feel what u r goin though. it love it 5/5

I feel what u r goin though. it love it 5/5

Wow! this is...a heart breaking I guess!
so sad, yet very meaningful! I know the feeling hun. just hope you're Okay
great piece, lovely written,I enjoyed every line and stanza!
wish u the best
Luv
NemO x0x0x0x0x

Poem is great, though idea is frowned upon. However you wrote it great and that is what I'm here to judge :D great job :D

I am here for you always. Sorry i havent commented for a while but theres so much pain and hurt in my life right now that i'm finding it kinda hard to cope with alot. Sorry about that hun :) I hope you are ok cos it is rather sad.

Nice job! but it was quite sad acually. I hope your not too depressed. well, good job. 5/5

You have so much talent, and your poems are some of the best i have ever read, keep it up
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Songs abotu depression come thick and fast on this site, but yours really stands out. well doen on successfully making me cry. lol
rock on.

I feel like I've read this before. It's so similar to your 'Lost' poem. I like the repetition of:

"I am slipping away again"

It was a good technique to use. You say you didn't know how to end it, I would suggest the easiest thing would be to just repeat the first stanza at the end, maybe tweak the words here and there.

Other than that, it does show the struggle of depression in all it's sadness. Good work. x

I thought you ended this well! I love the title of this poem-it caught my attention and I enjoyed reading it. I love all your poems---Once again perfect job---5/5