Quite a bit of dark imagery here, which is fantastic. It kind of oozes a lot of pent-up hostility toward the person being written about. I particularly like this stanza:

Your body would freeze.
Except for your heart.
It was already cold,
Now it will fall apart.

Awwww This Yet Another Amazing Poem By You...I Enjoyed This One Not As Much As The Love Ones I Read Before...But This One Was Still Brilliant :D 5/5
Love,
Steph

Loved the images in this one it was really angry and a bit sad as well.
Keep it up you have great style

I really like this one. You are an excellent poet.

Your body would freeze.
Except for your heart.
It was already cold,
Now it will fall apart.

I think that should be the last line.. It suggests that the person died and that would make a nice ending, though the ending was already wonderful. This is an excellent poem.... Not your best, but very good.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Keep in touch.

The message here is straightforward and clear. It took me there.. creepy. Very well described scenary.
I was not to crazy about the rhyming here.. especially after just ready your poem "disapearing act" I expected better. Man I loved that poem. lol
Overall the scary theme is , well, scary.
thank you for this poem. I never could write scary poems like this.
I might have been inpired byt his one.

David Velazquez

I don't usually like dark poetry, but this one...wow. This was amazing, i really liked the last stanza. Another 5/5

Chemical Romance eh? I am also a rocker :P

Well, I loved it! :) I like how its so... well dark. >:) You seem to be a natural rhymer... This poem is amazing!! I like these stanzas the best:
Your body would freeze.
Except for your heart.
It was already cold,
Now it will fall apart.

You will stare right at me,
and say some kind of lie.
I won't listen to a word,
I'll just watch you die.

I am definitally adding you to my favorites.
Great Job Darien

5/5

This sure is great...
i actually know the song, is one of my favorites...
wonderful poem...

*isabel*