Konichiwa Mikochan,

I unfortunately need to find a lesser poem to critique, because I can't really find many faults with this one (I actually can't find any, I was being optimistic). I enjoyed how long the lines were, because they allowed for the rhymed couplets to exist without creating an overbearing rhythm. I liked the use of descriptive language and metaphor, and thought the message was done well.

Wow, Hun. This was FANTASTIC.

The flow was spot on, And the rhyming was great. And lets not forget about the meaning behind it. Very strong words you used aswell. I really liked this piece. Awesome job! && Thank you for the comments. 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

I can't give you much of the comment as your poem was clear and the words cut deep. The language was descriptive. Maybe people like that do have an "Aura"

Eyes burning with fatigue and brimming with acidic tears,

^^ i really like that line alot. i like how much detail you put into each line, you really explained the 'aura' well within each stanza. i can't spot anything i would change, so nice write

Wow! This poem was wonderful!!! Great Job Hun. Keep it up!

Much love!

I disagree with you completely about being able to identify people who have had a hard life (and by definition I would disagree with you) but this is a well constructed poem and enjoyable to read. You didn't need to elaborate.

Your so amazing. i honestly can't say anything bad and im so speachless i can't find the right words to express how beautiful and brilliant it is.

5/5!

I like this poem, it describes how I have felt often the last year. It makes me wonder about the flip side when life is good and the eyes shine.

The title caugh my eye,
all i can say is:talent :]
creating a patchwork of experiences, in life you've made,
Stitch by stitch, engraving a record that will never fade.
-fav. part
good word usage