I like this. You did a great job with expressing everything. Wonderful.

I love this poem. It had a good meaning behind it. Don't worry about writing sad poems. It's just how many people get their emotions out instead of keeping it bottled up inside. GREAT WORK.

Wow this is good luv it
........good to know your a fairly happy person:P
xxxluv monique

I really, really liked this. 5/5

I can't let them see the deflated caterpillar
With the butterfly mask of protection

Those were absolutely terrific metaphors! I loved this piece. It was really wonderful....of course I will give constructive criticism, but this poem doesn't need it! Jpoet*

Interesting!
First, you should know that a lot of people are like that.

Second, on the actual poem, the metaphors you were using stuck out as brilliant to me, such as the butterfly mask.

Regards,
DJ.

This is beautiful and very, very sad. I'm sorry that you were feeling this way at the time. All your pent up emotions and frustrations screams out of every word. I love the metaphor's that you used in this poem. You painted the picture of a very sad teenage girl, putting on a show that the rest of the world wants to see. When really deep inside your struggling with reality and the person that you are. This poem holds a lot of meaning in it, and it conveys a message to all that their are more people in the world that live life everyday under false pretenses just to make the rest of the world happy. Terrific job Jaime! I am very happy that you entered the contest so that I now have the chance of seeing a wonderful poet at work. Keep writing hun and I'll keep reading. 5/5

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Letty

You did a great job on the poem it was really deep and full of emotion 5/5 <33

Its a great poem very emotional and i luv it, some of the lines i can relate to and know how it feels, great job
5/5