"Cause I can grantee I won't make it through,"
guarantee
~~~
Strong song, with some interesting rhyming. I wasn't sure which parts were part of a scheme and which were unintentional, because it was slightly inconsistent from stanza to stanza, but it was good. I liked the placement of the chorus and the 'extro' (opposite of intro).

Aww *hugs* your song was really strong and deep. I didn't check for the flow or everything, I was too busy just reading and understanding it. Sometimes explainations aren't really needed. Your songs are really good,something I wouldn't mind listening to. Just don't forget everyone here at P&Q if you become a song writer.

It's an awesome song, i would love to hear it being sung, i tried singing lol =P it's really good. make it famous so i can hear it on the radio. =) good write

Wow, those are some pretty strong negative emtions about your mum. My mum and I don't get along too hott either. I once write a poem (not posted here) called my design and it basically tells how she drove me to commit my own suicide which I did on several occasions. However that was a long time ago, or rather a year ago. It is good to vent emotions because keeping strong ones like these to yourself will kill you, I know. I hope you can try go make things up with your mom, and until then my thoughts are with you.

-Tainted

"I'm not posting anymore poems at all. I don't see the point anymore, so rate all these ones low so then I can delete them =) "

taleee, what the h*ll are you talking about?? sorry, for swearing..but you cant stop writing poemss! you are so good and we will ALL miss you too much.. please dont stopp! *starts sobbing* hehe.. pleassee!

Rockin Lyrics! I love the venom part, Keep on writing!

Hehe, yay! i wanna hear itt! :P this was good, the emotion was really strong and i could feel how you were feeling.. the flow is good and i like the repeating of some of the lines.. like backup voices right? anyway, great poem! the only part i didn't really like was the last stanza.. it kind of threw me off a bit, but im sure it sounds great with music! 5/5

Dam girl, you sure know how to write lyrics. you display your emotion so well. awesome job

These are really great lyrics i so wich i could write like this. my fav bit is
"i don't wanna give into this game but when i hear you callin my name"

this line is so ture like you dont wana give into a certin person but when they say your name you just melt.

great work 5/5

keep um comin girl

gema xoxoox

Hmm, this was a good song. The rhymes were great!... woohoo!!!
But you should label the verse for me, I just can't figure them out : P

or it's because I'm lazy, and like things done for me :)

Wow... Nicely written. Love it. Powerful, emotional and sad... Hard enough to write as a poem, but even harder in the form of lyrics... Great write. 5/5

Very intense and such emotion
Sondos

That was good as both a poem and a song.

Rave

Very nicely done! your feelings were well protrayed and you could feel the intesity of your feelings! 5/5 for sure, nice job

Nice job with the flow and rhyme i am now trying to arange it to music in my head what chord progresion is it

Wow, I wish I could write lyrics this was a great song! The feelings are so intense that the read, or in this case listner ;) has to choice but to feel them. I'd love to hear this as an actual song sometime ^_^

I dont think this should be rated low. i really loved it! 5/5 i can relate 2 the song. so u make that up by ur self? later

I don't think that should be rated low at all! that was awesome and its really hard to make a good song like that, did you make it yourself?

-meg-

You are a great poet.

Omg. I so want to hear this now.. like reading made me want to hear someone singing it with a band or like something. D: