Very good work, mysterious and i really want to know more even though i got the general story. Brilliant word choice, needs a little polishing but very very good indeed
Sondos

Nice contrasts on this, you might wanna mess with your rhyme scheme a little, for some lines didn't seem to fit in. again, i like the contrasts like eyes/blind.. nice write

I do not know the reasons,
Of why this had to be,
Nor how you had known,
How to haunt my dreams,
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I REALLY liked that stanza. This was a great poem. Very serious poetry! Your flow was great aswell. I just thought it was a great piece overall. Nothing bad I can say about it. =) 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Wow.. that was greatt! it was so powerful and strong.. i couldn't tear my eyes away, it was truly excellent! the flow was good and the descriptions just fascinated me.. great job! 5/5

"The nightmares of my night,"
'nightmares' has the word 'night' in it, that's a disruptive repitition. I'd try a different word, like 'horrors', or 'specters', 'phantasms', 'terrors' etc.
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"Can not travel to my past,"
in this case I'd consider making 'can not' a single word 'cannot'. It is grammatically acceptable, and removes the slight pause.
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Somehow the word 'hold' wasn't a very satisfying ending word for me, phonetically. You can dismiss this particular part of the critique, since just saying something doesn't work out for me helps you in no way at all.
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I thought this was a good poem, filled with enough imagery and symbolism to keep the reader going. The rhythm was fairly consistant. I thought the repitition of the 'with which' phrases was good, but then again, I just really enjoy that sort of sentence construction.

Good job, liked it.
Maybe some word changes here or there.

Great job!!

joy*:.xx

Aww this is really good.

Wow i likeed it! it was actually really interestingg! 5/5.

i changed my poem "him" can you read it agiann.. and tell me what you think noww? thankss!

-KElseyy.

This is a very deep poem Kaylee. Wow, I was stunned. It's sometimes hard to write personal poems, or at least, post them. But thanks for posting this one, it was a good write. This one seems like it's about weakness, or someone who has low self-esteem that they can bring themselves up. That's where friends come in, to give them that extra hand and the boost to keep going. They are sometimes your support group, your eyes, for when you can't see what's going on. Wow, this poem.. I can totally relate. Reading it over and over, I love it more and more.

Wow great poem, repeating the first two lines of the second stanza in the last one worked very well, well done

Great oem, its really good to see great poetry like this

kazza

Wonderful job, perfect ending

Any person with half a mind reading this poem would probaly say its great. im gonna tell you how it contributed to my feelings. it was amazing. talking about how great it truly is to hgave someone there for you. i absolutuly know that feeling. i also know how it feels to lose that person. keep in touch.

This was a great poem! You write truly good poetry, with the imagery, metaphors, symbolism, flowing rhyme schemes...everything is perfect about the way you write, and I am in no fairly higher position than you to criticise any of it. 5/5 xxx

Its spooky... it kept my hooked till the very last word. nice poem. your poems are a great inspiration for aspiring poets like me... keep writing... enjoy...