Wow.....one of the best poems I've read--5/5 your an amazing poet with a lot of talent so keep writing!!!

Aww i love this poem
it perfect 5/5

if u need to talk im here

I loved the poem ALOT it had great meaning and plot! You have so much talent for thirteen. and much much more then I could ever have! you begin to lose organizeation a tiny tiny bit in one part but it was a fabulous (sp?) poem none the less. Great Job and I look forward to reading more of your work.

~~RetniapDoolb
~Julie

You are an amzing writer.....I love this poem......kinda sounds like my life....god bless you sister....5/5

Very sad touching story!

"what did she say"
[that line seemed too short]

Everything else was good. Flow and rhyme were nice, so it was a good poem. Easy to read and understand. Good stuff.

Long poem!!!!!!! but thats ok, it was really good, I love the way it's written! GREAT JOB! perfect score

It was long and it was emotional and i loved it!

You have alot of talent, your work is amazing.
I really liked the last stanza, it really got to me.
Another great poem and another 5/5 from me.

Another really sad poem, keep up the awesome work

Wow, this is very emotionally written. The flow and the structure was very well. So much meaning within this poem. You are very a very talented writter. Keep up the great work!!!

Peace, Joe

BRILLIANT is a word that can describe this entire poem. it is so beautifully sad and touching. my friend has struggled with suicidaly thougts and im alway afraid that sum thing i say will put her over the edge. and this piece kinda shows the other side of that. i loved the way it was written and how it flowed well. i also loved the fact it was written as a story i love poems like that. anyways def keep up the good work. and id appreciate it if u could comment on my poems
andi

"she didn't want to leave just yet
she didn't want to go
but she was already half dead
cause of pain she couldn't show"

^^Oh how I love that stanza, that really stood out to me, I found it to be very powerful and moving with such great intensity.

"her parents of course the weep"

^^they weep?

I didn't like the cutting references in this, however I did love the depth and emotion you portrayed in this, it was beautifully done.

I loved the ending stanza, I found it to be incredibly sad and touching at the same time.