Wow! I loved this poem! I really liked the begginging part about puking ur feelings and flushing them down the toilet. I also liked the ending part, I thought it finished really well. The only part that in a way side tracked the mood was when you started the last stanza with "so". I think you should have just said "Even though". Its such a great poem! :)

Really this is a nice poem and you must have put alot of emotions into it though parts are a bit repetitive whether this was intentional or not such as your mouth being closed and not being able to talk. BUt as I;ve said it is a nice poem.

This poem brings back the memory of when I was in love for the first time. YOU DID A GREAT JOB

Awesome writing =) nice one
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I thought this one was pretty good! It sounds like it is suppose to be a song.....is it? pretty goood keep writing!

Please return the favor as said in the forum!!!