"Twisting its limbs to a neater angle"
I don't like the phrase 'neater angle', maybe some other adjective other than 'neater' is more appropriate.
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Interesting poem, I thought the symbolism and was really well developed. Nice start.

You painted a beautiful picture,so descriptive and touching, very well writen, great flow and use of rhymes. you have talent , can't wait to read more well done much luv lynne

Oh...my...god! totally took my breath away...i loved it...it's such an excellent poem...

Torn apart but drawn together
They lie upon the naked ground
Fallen close, still, a feather
Could barely make a softer sound

that caught me right from the beginning...a perfect start...the rest was just as great...please keep writing...i'd love to read more of your work...

comment me when you post more please...

never stop writing...you have an amazing talent.

~*~lisa~*~

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Well, if you decide you like the whole "creative thing" or if you decide you don't, know either way that you are a gifted writer. Your imagery and symbolism is incredible and adds great depth to your poetry. You had a nice rhyme pattern that was concistant and not foced, plus you had a beautiful flow. I was flored by your diction (word choose) and how perfectly the words you picked represented you message. You have an amazing start to becoming an even better writer than you are now. (whichi is a good one.)

-Tainted

That was really good. I enjoyed reading it. woOt!

Ravyn

Wow, I love this, its very deep.

~blackrose

I think you should stick to the whole "crative thing", because you're really good at it. you depicted an awesome image. and the poem was very well written
good job
~HazE