Hey gurl!

I know you are so good at what you do girl. you know i have read all of your poems and we tite.

so when i critisize you it is only for your good.

girl you had a theme in this one . There was good flow at the begining and then the end of the first stanza it stopped. the flow was lost. i d k if you ment to do that but it just happend and i mean it is great what you are saing but it just didn't seem right to me that you started to rhyme then you stopped started to flow then stopped . i am just saying what i feel.
you don't ahve to listen to me. you are a talented girl and i wish you the best of luck.

keep writing

diva

I love this poem you're a brilliant writer and show so much emotion keep up the great work! :)

5/5!!!!

Wow. i really loved this. it was absolutely stunning. i really got chills down my spine and i could see picture vividly in my mind. definitely 5/5.

Awe so sad but I love it, like I also love all of your poems. and thanks for the comment by the way ;). I'M HOME I MISSED YOU TOO =(. IF YOU'RE HOME I'LL TRY COME SEE YOU TOMORROW =D

Ray Ray

Heidi!
long time no comment!
this poem... is more like a sad story, one that resonates with endless sorrow. i can taste the bitter blood, hear the shattering cries, and feel the heavy burden of the two lovers. beautifully breathtaking.

Brilliant 5/5

Wow oh my goodness!! so good

awesome job

Truly amazing. every line kept me wishing it would never end. wow truly a 5/5 for me. check out some of my stuff

just*some*gurl

That was a good poemm...=) lol

This is very well written. a peice of art.

I'm speechless. This heart-wrenching story of two suffering lovers is perfectly portrayed through every stanza. A love so powerful, it couldn't live in life, but in death. Stunning. I will read it over and over again. :)

5/5