Good poem but I found some mistakes.

"He left with th party"
I'm not really sure what that was suppose to be, but I think you meant "He left the party"

"As she write out her story"
Write should be writes.

I really liked the ending of the poem.

Crying over her notebook
Tears of deep sorrow
The young girl has lost her love

Wow I've been there...This poem was very well written and I'm sorry if its true...Terribly sad to know it happens to people for real!
-Krissey

P.S could u read "Some kids don't play" thanks!

Wow... that was reallly dark. I love the way that you ended it. The flow and rhythm of it was really good and I just loved it from beginning to end! you did a great job on this! Definitely a 5/5*

I liked that poem, i think it was well written and really good
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Wow. Very haunting/sad poem.

You put a good twist on it. As I was reading it, I never thought it would end like that.

I really liked the ending you had. She can't have him, and now no one else can either.

you've done a great job on this! Keep it up =) 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Wow. The ending was very bone chilling. Great poem. 5/5.

LOVED the ending.... 5/5