I really liked it...i think it could be longer but i loved how you worded everything and keep it the way it is

Hey! i love it, it's really well written, and i think it would flow really well with music. i also think it could be a bit longer, but apart from that, i think it was GREAT!!

WOW this is really good this is a gaurantee song. Way to go I liked it and if you ever put it into song I wanna hear it

Nicely penned down but yaar i m not gud at songs, so cannot suggest u. but really its a nice one.
keep writing

luv

I think its great ....5/5 :)

This is just so superb yaar, wow its really beautiful

Teach me how to swim
then drown me in this sorrow
Let me sleep tonight
I'm not waiting for tomorrow

m sure its my turn to be speechless and u surely made me one... :o)
ultimate piece & i stills stand on my words...u r a multi talented person.

all the best and take care
5/5

Wow hun this is good as a poem or a song! 5/5 i love the chorus xxx