I liked reading this poem, and it has a lot of meaning and its very true. Although one thing i would suggest is that maybe divide your thoughts. put commas and periods perhaps or sperate them by paragraphs. Besides that i thought the poem was lovely and had deep meaning. great poem! i loved it! Check mine on sometime too!

That poem was great.
It was a poem that gave advice and i think thats really neat .
good job 5/5