This poem does not suck at all in fact it is really good. sometime i get like this with an ex he makes me feel like im dying inside.
i really love it stop sayin your work is crap and enjoy it plz he he.

5/5 again great work

This des not “suck” at all, you expressed yourself very well in it. And though the repetition seems a bit much in places for the most part the piece is very well written with some very well conveyed expressions

5/5

Well, when things are wrong, they make good writes. Strong poem. The repitition in this poem was alright, it helped the poem a bit.

I think you should cut back the word 'Beat' near the end, to kind of give it, a heart fading type thing. Like the heart it slowing down.. you know?..

I didnt think it sucked! I could have had more lines to it but i liked it! Good job.

--Steph

This poem definately doesnt suck. I liked it. The repestition really helps the poem flow but I do agree with Darien about cutting back the ''beats'' at the end. Overall it was really good! 5/5