No suggestions.
not my kind of poetry by eah to their own.
each*
anyway
keep it up and keep smilin'
~Emma

Hey
thankyou for commenting on my poem.
i really like the use of describing words in this piece, ity adds mood and character.
thanyou again
greta
xx

Thanks Hun :)

This really isn't all that bad.. (well least imo)

it has many parts, in which i really, really liked.. so 5/5

keep 'em coming
jm