Aay guh
dis poem wus igh...jus dat
u should rhyme sum shii
u nah mean ?
anywayz,keep up da gd work
PÉàçÉ

A love the style of this, the idea is a really good one and its been wriiten very well .

-biscuit-

You need to work on your grammar.. You have fragmented sentences all over the place there and you didn't you one apstrophe. It really takes away from the whole poem... And this could be such a strong poem.

xDarkSuicidex

Wow....now i need to becaeful of boyz now...good poem!! i liked it!