Really well written. Very descriptive. 5\5 Love you to vote and comment on any of mine.

Short but oh so amazing! Wonderful poem, depicts the torment very very well!
The last rhyme makes it end perfectly too!

Love it!!!!
xxx

It's very good. The fact that none of it rhymes and then you rhyme the end of it kind of bugs me a little - like an inconsistency of style a bit.

Beautiful... and painful, i like, but i hate to see so much pain. hmmm, i wish we could talk more, so i might help....

penible,
Nem

It's simple and short but really powerful and meaningful.
Excellently written.

This is a very shortand sweet poem dear. I liked your wordings. There is still room for improvement like improving the rhymes. However you have managed to keep it flowing good and you got 5/5 from me.

With love
Fsams