I realy realy liked this one. it was so sad and gave me this chills! a great read. Keep up the good work darl

Wow, i like it, i don't get all of it, but that doesn't make it any less good. 5/5

Really good suz. really good. it means heaps coz i know what it means now. good thing u explained it. Lol. but yeah, it's not that bad, don't stress urself *hugs*
they're ok. ttyl
-Brain

The poison paralyseparalyzedt
[Using big words, eh? It was cool. Even though I'm not sure what it means.]

I thought it was a great poem. I really liked the 2nd last stanza. It was awesome. Keep up the great work. And thanks for your comments. =) 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Wow.. that is really good and it had some amazing imagery and kind of spooky. But you did an amazing job on this! 5/5 Keep it up!

Oh no, no, no. it's not a big complicated word, it's a really really big typo. Lol. thanks for helping me realise : D it's supposed to be "poison paralysed my heart"
LOL. cheers for ur comments everyone. this is a very touchy subject to which i wrote my poem about, so even if u don't understand the underlying message and feelings, ur comments mean a heap. thanks
-Suzie

Thats the way ahuh ahuh i like it ahuh ahuh!
lmao
I really like it
but if you need to talk i promise you my ears are open and my head shall try and think of something to say to help
love you 4 eva and always after that.
~Emah

"My headstone's a small angel
Choking the life from a dove"

I LOVE those two lines. How vivid. This whole poem is just a perfect example of how picking the right words can make or break a poem. Different words meaning the same things wouldn't have worked nearly as well. Great job.

This is quite a poem. It's descriptive, with great imagery (Poems with good imagery are my favourites).

"Remember though when you are judged
He will know what you've done"

Does this mean the dead person was murdered, or have you suddenly changed perspective, and are now talking directly to the dead person, which would mean it was suicide. I'm assuming she was murdered, right?

"The blood still seeping through the cracks"

That line made me shudder. An exceptionally good piece if you can make me think, picture, and react in some way from words.

I hope your other pieces are as good as this one. x

Wow----this is a great poem-It it so powerful because of the imagery and the way you worded it. My favorite lines are:

''My headstone's a small angel
Choking the life from a dove''

You portrayed so much pain and it gave me the chills---5/5

Wow...another excellent poem...it took my breath away...keep it up.

Wow! I really liked this. There was such a strong image and strong details. I loved the message, the theme and the rhymes, everything was perfect!

Great work

--Steph

Hmm I think I get it, with teh grave and dead references you have mentioned to me before.....
Great work as usual, I bow to the master of poetry. As by the public.

Ttyl doll face,
Matt

Wow that was my favorite so far... really gave me the chills, but it was wonderful... a completely different way and view of looking a things... nic job

Wow that was my favorite so far... really gave me the chills, but it was wonderful... a completely different way and view of looking a things... nic job

Once again beautiful! this one gave me the chills! i am going to add you to my favorites!

I'm puzzled as to what is happening in the poem, it says you're bleeding, then it says you're alive and im not sure how a tombstone can choke a dove, and the world would have to be upside down if the rain fell to the sky, i think that "to" should be "from". Apart from that, i like your use of language and bringing the poem to a clear point. Your ideas in the poem are quite interestingly thought up. Its a good job and keep it up!

WOW! i'm really confused, but very speechless it was great, and the parts i understood were amazing!

Very nice poem- thanks for sharing it with us
I have a new poem now "Phone Booth"- i would really appreciate it if you could read/rate it :)

Wow, it was beautiful...
I don't even no what to say.
everything else had already been said.

GOOD JOB

I loved it.

Amberinaa*