How?

by bella   Jul 7, 2006


You stole my heart so long ago,
leaving me helpless not knowing where to go,
my words get jumbled and my heart speeds up,
but o how I long for your touch,
I long for are first kiss,
I wait for the time when are lips first hit,
the feeling of such sweet heavenly bliss,
o what rapture, o what bliss,
each and every time that we are apart,
I feel an emptiness in my heart,
so many things happen at once leaving me helpless,
wishing I knew what to do about this,
how to react and what to say,
hoping to figure out when and which way,
how should I express these feelings to you,
how can I show you that the way I feel is true,
show you how deeply I feel towards you,
showing that these, feelings are true,
all of this is how I feel towards you.
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  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    "but o how I long for your touch,"
    - o = oh

    "I long for are first kiss,"
    NOTE:
    (ARE) is used as we are, they are, you are.
    (OUR) is used as our house, our home, our love, OUR FIRST KISS.

    "I wait for the time when are lips first hit,"
    - Renote the noted above in this line as well

    "o what rapture, o what bliss,"
    o = oh (x2)

    "each and every time that we are apart,"
    - EXAMPLE: are is used correctly here. (:

    I'd suggest stanzas and question marks where they belong. By stanzas I mean separating the poem into 'chunks' in order to help it flow a bit more. Instead of all together I think it would work in 2 or 3, maybe even 4 (but that's not so likely). By question marks I mean when you're asking the questions how and such, at the end instead of a comma use a question mark.

    Good poem. Great emotion. Very relatable. Needs work, but it's well written.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Good poem :)

    I like it

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