This is good... well written and good rhymes...i enjoyed reading it:)
take care, xoxo

The poem started off really nice and powerful, but the in the end it started to die and get less powerful so the end klindof left you in an akward state..like..."oh, its over"..well thats the only thing i though needed a bit of improvement..otherwise it was a very beautiful dark poe,:)

Very nice one! Love it.