Cayce, that was very sad. Again, another poem I've read of how a love can truely hurt someone - maybe without even intenting to, and it's a painful feeling.

After reading "Like A Rose" though, I feel you can do better with the description. You've told a story, but maybe you could explain just what she's feeling, how her heart is cracking, and that's she completely helpless.

I'll be reading some more of your work when I have the time. x

I liked this poem too. Especially how you told a story. Imagery could've been better, but it was a very good poem.

WOW! Amazing write!!! I love how you ended the poem with a question that makes you think. I love the flow and the way you worded everything. Very powerful---5/5 Keep it up!

Wow, another poem about death, that's creepy!! Oh man, this one was a really sad. Even worst is the suicide. I don't really know how people could put a blade to their own skin and start cutting away. It's just unbelieveable. Well, anyways a really good poem!

Such a beautiful and realistic depiction of how much love hurts. I enjoyed this very much.

5/5

joy*:.xx

That was awesome, but very sad. =( it also flowed well, and i liked how it ended in a question. i like questions in poems, because they always make me think...=) it sounded so real; it felt like it was happening in front of me. good job. 5/5
~rhi

This poem was full of deceptions and heartbreak and was expressed very well. It flowed, and I couldn't find one flaw! I liked a lot of stanzas independently, for each one had a impact of choice. Overall, I like the topic, and I loved how you chose to express it. Great!

I can certainly relate to that as I witnessed a similar situation with a dear friend of mine. Truly a sad story but well written... Keep up the great work! 5/5

OH, SAD!! This was a great write. I loved the ending 'Now who should we blame'. 5/5

Great poem very unique it was wonderful and it flowed great also!!!

Please r/r/c love and life vs I! thanks

Cayce -
Great job! Again, the rhyming was better than in most poems. I really enjoyed reading this ;; keep it uP! 5/5

Samantha Hollywood

@...The last 4 stanzas were my favourite....they just put the whole poem in its place. Some of the rhyming sounded a tad bit forced but it was good all the same:)...@5/5