Comments : And So I`ll Be Seeing You (Song)

  • 13 years ago

    by not a poet

    Best one yet!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • 13 years ago

    by Chris

    Pretty good i give it a 4/5 kinda plain but i like the style of writing
    good job

    God Bless

    -chris

  • 13 years ago

    by holly

    I absolutely adore these lyrics!!!!!!!!!!!!!! the flow so perfectly and it all just fits so well an absolutely fantastic job i dont know what else to say lol
    xxALLYxx

  • 13 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    Wow i can actually see this as becoming a song! Keep it up Hollywood!

  • 13 years ago

    by Mich

    Really nice song... Bit sad though but all in all ity was good

  • 13 years ago

    by None

    The first problem I saw with your poetry was the punctuation. You have periods where no periods should be, commas where no commas should be. Why, in the first verse there are multiple grammatical errors. Let me know when you have fixed these problems and I will get back to reading this lyrical poem.

  • 13 years ago

    by J Lau

    A couple of comments... "anything like you do" should be "anything like you did" and "And so I`ll.." may sound better if you have "And so I will...". Other then that, good write. love the emotions in the piece. Keep up the good work. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by BrokenMisery

    That is really good for your age. It had a clear ending that wrapped the whole song together. I felt your first and second verses varied perhaps a little too much in rhythm because verses are played to the same music.

    The first line of the bridge "You were the only thing I had to hold on" would sound better as "You were the only thing I had to hold on to", it would be more complete. Also you ended verse 2 saying "You know that I can never,
    Move on." by the end of the bridge says "That`s how I`ll move on."... I also dont know what you mean by saying "You`ll always be with me,
    And I`ll be with you." When the song is suggesting that it is over, and you miss him... because then how can he be with you when the song is saying that hes not?

    Its a good song and I like the flow of it. Keep writing and keep practising!

  • 13 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    The lyrics were great, i cant sing nor can i put a tune to lyrics, but i tried my best and this was really good, keep writing

  • 13 years ago

    by Truest Lies

    Um, nice. I especially liked

    I loved you more than anything,
    Mistake I won`t excuse.

    That caught my eye, as though you were saying that it was a mistake to love (whoever) more than anyting. I suppose in a way that it is.
    I can't work out what type of music you would sing it to.
    Sad, or sort of upbeat?
    Anyway, nice work.

    //T.L.//

  • 13 years ago

    by AnnMarie

    This song was pretty good I liked it...it was really nice! There was a definate flow, and it was very unique. Great job,

    Please r/r/c whatever three you have not already read..........thanx

    -AnnMarie-

  • 13 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    Aw Sam this was really good! You've really got talent sweetheart! I really loved the end. Great work.I loved it!
    --Steph

  • 13 years ago

    by Clarissa

    It could be just me but i can relate to the song i really liked it and it flowed nicely, good job :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Unforgiven Retniap doolb

    Well yeah you asked me to comment on this so I will but I'm not much a song commenter but I liked it. I seemed to lose interest because of its length.

    ~~Retniapdoolb

  • 13 years ago

    by nikki

    This is wonderful the lyrics are so good. it feels like it could rly be a song i rly like it good job 5/5

  • The words of the song were good, if i were you i would use more descriptive words, it seemed pretty plain!!! Its hard to judge a song with out music like hAwAiiZaNgEl said. I could see it becoming a song later in life!!!! It was EXCELLENT for your age!!! I have always wanted to write a song but i dot have enough talent to!! So i admire you for being able to!! The flow of the song was GREAT!! Overall i would give it a 5/5!! Keep it up!!

  • 13 years ago

    by Sole

    I loved reading this song. The lyrics were good, but not too intense, which is good once in a while. I would love to hear this song with a tune, I can picture how gerat it would sound in my mind. Well written.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 13 years ago

    by twisted reality

    This song is very touching, in ways. Although I really didn't like how the flow had gone, others might. I didn't really like the repeating of some of the verse where it has it in the next line, in the same sentence.

    But I had to let you know,
    And I had to let this show.
    [And so I`ll..
    And so I`ll] be seeing you.

    It probably brings out a lot in a song, but I'd rather not have it in it. Just my opinion. =) 4/5 xoxo

    Smanatha

  • 13 years ago

    by Biscuit

    Great song, i want to hear it, can u sing it to me :P im sure it would be wonderful, although the 1st first doesnt really fit with the structure of the others...

    -biscuit-