I really liked how you went with the rhyming scheme..personally I dont like it as much but the words and the thoughts are still great..
Great job

5/5

God Bless

-Chris

Nicely done! Excellent choice of words and well laid out. Great work! 5/5

Great piece of work. the rhyme and the syllable restriction was perfect.

peace
shobhana

So Nat...I definatley LOVED this style..I haven't heard of this one either but I just absolutley loved it!!

You hold the key to what I'm yearning to say,
If only you would come and unlock my door,
I'd tell you exactly how I feel today.

^ I loved those lines...my fave part of the poem!!

WoW! Your first go? I would honestly never have guessed. As a poor sonnet writer, in any form, I adore this piece! Amazing work, keep it up!

Peace. [Sole]

I really liked this poem. I loved the Terza Rima rhyme scheme that you used. It was very original. Great job. My favorite stanza was:

"You hold the key to what I'm yearning to say,
If only you would come and unlock my door,
I'd tell you exactly how I feel today."

5/5. Very original and well written. I admire people who write different kinds of poems. Keep up the great job! :D

I like it. I going to try writing a Terza Rima poem.

This Piece was very enjoyable, I think you did very good for your first try, I myself am horrible at sonnet's, but you on the other hand, are great, the Ideas you portrayed, were Excellent, Your work is always Original, keep up the great work.

OMG i know how that feels and damn, it was just a beautiful poem. you deffinately got a gift. keep up the good work, i wanna read more of your stuff.

I really like Sonnets, but I have never read any of this style. You did a great job on this one, and I'm not quite sure why they are voting this one badly. Hmm, oh well, I know you are a talented writer, and I hope you know you are a talented writer!..

The rhymes were good, but the 2nd verse, I had to read it a few times. It just didn't rhyme naturally. It was more of a similar sound type rhyme. But other than that, it was a great poem.

OMG.. This is the first LOVE POEM I get to comment for you!! woohoo!!!..

"You hold the key to what I'm yearning to say,"

I loved that line! You certainly have a talent for written different types of poem. I can usually only write freestyle and Haikus but I've seen a lot of different kinda from you. You did an especially great job on this. The theme, the flow and everything else was perfect 5/5.

--Steph

Loved this poem, i understand completely what it is trying to say. i feel the same way every day of my life.

You did really good on this. It's hard to believe this is your first poem in this form. It's a great poem, and I can relate to it. It's filled with so much love and care. My favorite part was:
The love that is in my heart you have captured,
Never will these feelings I have go astray,
Words from my mouth and soul will not go unheard.
That just really stood out to me. You did a great job on this. Keep it up, you are an amazing poet!! 5/5

Hey i liked your poem and yes you did very alright at it. keep up the good work. it was excellent. Hey if you have time can you check out my featured poems ( there are only 2) and comment. I'd love you're feed back- good or bad. Thanx! God bless -erica

I really liked your poem that was good for just starting. You'll be a poet in no time you go!!!!!!!!!!

Deep itz just deep and dats nice

I really thought this poem was excellent! I liked it alot. GOOD job!

Hey i think this poem is very good it touched me deep down in side keep up the good work

Not bad at all congrats on an awesome 5/5 job

Very good for a first attempt. I think the problem with this type of poem is the strict rhyme scheme and flow but you carried it of well None of the rhymes seemed at all forced and flowed really well.
I love the subdued frustrated feel that comes out in the final 2 lines.
5/5