I've never heard of this kind of poem, and it is so interesting! Your poem was very deep, and each line captured my attention and made effort to the poem's meaning. I really liked some of your lines and expressions. Overall, it was great! I enjoyed.

Wow, Nat.

this is good. of course.

extremely sad, though.
i love you so much, hun. i'm ALWAYS here for you, ok? always, awlays, always. don't be afraid to come talk to me when you need to get everything out.
keeping it all bottled up isn't goooood, woman!

E> you.

keep up the fantastic writing. =)

A good piece Natalie. And very sad. You've filled this with emotion, and it really shows.

"My mouth is sewn shut so words cannot spray,"

That is an exceptionally good line in my opinion.

Great work there. x

WOW.. That is an absolutely amazing poem. And it seems like a very difficult poem type, but you did such a great job on it. It was so captivating and I loved it from beginning to end. Great job on this! 5/5

Hmmm.
i dont particualarly like this style of poem.
but as long as you like it thats all that matters.
~Emah

Wonderful job, Rejection is also one my biggest fears. As an answer to your comment, that was the first time I've tried this style

Definately 5/5
its an awesome piece.
It's well formed and there's no criticism from me
~Emah

Awww hunni that was soo sad...it brought tears to my eyes, mainly b/c i can definitely relate to this..i loved it you did a great great job on it!!! you're a great writer sweetie!!! keep it up xoxo

Oh wow...this is excellent...i can totally relate to it...i loved this so much...superb details...strong emotions...plus the structure is something i havn't seen before...5/5.

Great job. That last two lines have a strange rhyming to it. Keep it up!

You should check out my Ottava Rima in my other account

Very nice... Perhaps I'll attempt my Ottava Rima soon. I really enjoyed this piece. It was dark and suttle...the way I like it. Great job. 5.5

xDarkSuicidex

That was a different style of poem to what I usually read but thats what makes it stand out to me. Was great to read and I thnk you did extremely well. Keep it up :)

I feel that this poem expressed many emotions in an excellent format the rhyme scheme was not forced and the rhythm of the poem was smooth and a point was made and easily understood

I thought this was good. You used a good range of vocab to describe the poems events. The the rhyming was fluent untill the last two lines of each stanza. I think the transition from the abab scheme to the cc rhyme scheme could have been better, and to me sounded aa tad forced, sorry.
Overall good poem though, keep writing.

Very sad but a great peom. I really like the middle stanza. I like how you keep questioning. Awesome job. 5/5

>black&&blue

This poem was just fantastic, I hope to write one real soon, this is my new favorite style, and you pulle dit off without a hitch, written brilliantly. Timothy r

Its sad in an almost haunting kind of way, but written beautifully...
i especially like this part
"Can you hear of this help that I crave for,
As I am screaming it towards your ears?
Begging and crawling all over the floor,
Still reaching for your hand while I'm in tears."
I dont know what it is about that but it is so captivating

5/5

I have to say, that thats one of the most greatest poems I have ever read! You did great!! Keep it up..

*Jess*

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Loved one of your poems, yet again. xD I liked the flow of all of the words placed together on each row. You're a really good writer. Keep it up! =) xoxo

¤ Samantha ¤

Loved it. Very powerful and strong language. It was really sad but angry too

Save me from who you have made me become,
Because you know that you're not the victim.

Loveley forceful ending
Great 5/5