Adieu

"Like stars above thy sky,
Thou wilt be mine
Like sunshine upon thy face,
Thou wilt be mine.
Like waves struck into thy sand,
Thou wilt be mine.
Like the beating of thy heart,
Thou wilt be mine.
O Hark thy Love,
Thy sky is dark,
Thy face hath become ice,
Thy sea is calm,
And thy beating of thou heart,
Hath stopped.
Thy dear love, my love,
Thou trust is buried,
Thy hope is perished,
Thy future is withdrawn.
Adieu my Love,
Adieu.??

this is most deffinitly a new style for me. plz comment! good or bad i don't mind constructive critisism, I wrote it for a 1950's book i'm currently writing so i thought i would try to get some feed back. Thanx!