Comments : Anniversary of Two Hearts

  • 17 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    Wow---that made me speechless--Amazing job with it,,,,The rhyme helped the flow yet is not forced at all and you put so much passion into how the two people feel. The word choice is perfect for the write and everything fits together perfectly. Amazing write! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Bill Turner

    Awesome poem....beautifully written.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jackie Marie

    Awwww. This piece made me smile. Most of the ones I have read lately are sad. This one just brightened my day. Good job Darien. You took me out of my sad day. Aren't you proud of yourself. Hahaz. It was beautifully written and I love every bit of it.

    >black&blue

  • 17 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    "Dressed to a T" not "tee"... far as I can find, anyway.

    Other than that, it's fantastic and absolutely beautiful. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Very beautiful, romantic job! You're an excellent poet. Great choice of words.

    *Check out my new ones

  • 17 years ago

    by Aussie

    Very sweet poem. i like how u capture the simpule things of happyness:)

  • 17 years ago

    by Lu

    Awww Darien you paint such a beautiful picture of love and romance with this poem.
    Love is definately in the air with this piece.

    As someone above mentioned the T...tee thingy . I am sad to say I have no clue which one is right but I can offer the word
    " handsomely" ...
    Wonderful read Darien . Captivating my attention from beginning to end.

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    This is a really sweet poem. And you described everything perfectly. I could picture it all in my mind. And you had great word usage. I love the first two lines, I'm not sure why, but it just seems really sweet how he waited for her. But I love the whole poem, very beautifully written. Great job on this 5/5 Keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    Another triumph. This was such a sweet poem, so heartfelt annd tender. A wonderful snapshot of life that really brightened my day.

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    Excellent poem! 5/5 I loved every word of this, great rhyming and usage of words! Keep up the great work!

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    Daunting, she beckons him to the dance floor
    Nervous yet confident, he makes his way
    sweet symphony's of an enchanting tune
    moving gracefully, like dancers of ballet
    [ I LOVED THAT STANZA ]

    Awww!! This was soooo cuuuute. Tehe. It made me go "aw" haha. I thought it was written really well. Really good choice of wording, and the flow and rhyming were great. It was just a great poem lol. I just don't get how you can write them.. I write a love poem and it turns out bad. haha. yeah. well I wanna make this comment long since I'm never really on p&q much anymore.. So yeah? What's been happening? Lol.. I ran into a wall the other day. It really hurt. :/

    Mmmkay. I'll go now. It was a beautiful poem though, Darien. I just wish MY superman would be like that. haha. 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 17 years ago

    by Welshy

    Aahhh romance...
    awesome poem m8,
    i especially like the last stanza..
    your words almost dance ib this 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by lexie

    Awwww
    that was so sweet and adorable.romance is a wonderful topic.especially when its from a guy.wonderful poem!!
    --lexie

  • 17 years ago

    by TheRevelation

    Nice job your poems are wonderful and of meaning and passionate

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Intertwined fingers, webs of passion

    I absolutely loved that line. It really seemed to glisten in the poem making it all it could be, along with the last line.

    A great poem of love. Wonderfully written as well.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • Wow, Darien. This was amazing. =O! Lol..

  • 17 years ago

    by Ebone

    This poem was wonderful full of life and emotions

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaylee

    What I really like about your first stanza is the imagery of the two people as they depart but mostly the quick comment on what she is wearing and how you can feel a bit of excitement coming from the boy after all that waiting to see her again.

    Your second stanza was so calm and the deepness of the words adds so much to it. Especially with the line about the romance which swept the poem into your next few lines.

    I love your word choice to describe things!

    The ending of the poem was so sweet. If this is true you better show it to that girl.

  • 17 years ago

    by Heather

    I loved how it flowed & everything about it. All I have to say is "Awww"

  • 17 years ago

    by 111308

    This Poem Was Absolutely Beautiful! Your A Great Writer..I Enjoyed This One..I Haven't Gotten To Your Others But I Know I'll Enjoy Your Work! 5/5 Thanks For The Comments On My Poems As Well :D I'm Only 15 So Not An Amazing Writer...Well I'm Better Off At Writing Stories But Poems...I Really Like To Do... I Know I Have A Ways To Go Before There Perfect... And There's Really No One Around Me That I Can Show Them Too..Cause I Don't Trust Many People...So Ya Anyways Beautiful Poem..
    Love,
    Steph