Nelle. If you EVER say farewell, I shall.. Hmmm..What would I do? Well I guess...I'd be very mad at you because I love your poetry. So i hope is nothing even close to about you!

Great poem. The flow was excellent. Keep it up.

>black&&blue

First stanza: "nonetheless" and "pity". :)

Fifth stanza: Any reason "so" and "she's" are capitalized? It focusses on them for seemingly no reason. Just a thought.

Last stanza: BANSHEE?? lol that's funny

I really like the poem as a whole, though. Lots of great imagery and a sad but real message.

Awwww omg this is soo sad but its really good. please dont kill yourself. if u need to talk i'm here for you. keep writing your really good. 5/5

She falls to the floor hoping to die so she can break free
She wonders if she will soon get a visit from banshee.
I know how she feels, I know her all too well
Possibly, because this girl is me and this is my farewell.

Aside from those maybe needing to be broken down, I really liked it. The flow was really good until the last four lines...they just became too long for the poem. But that's ok, I still enjoyed reading it and I loved the part about the blood filled cracks. It is rather witty. ;)

Take Care.

xDarkSuicidex

I almost cried.i kno how it feels...all to well.i use to feel this way everyday and wrote so many poems like this.but am so glad i got help.and i'm always here if you need to talk.ne ways,it was absolutly beautiful work.
--lexie

Aww! nelle this is so sad, I'm sure alot of people can relate to this, i know i can. Some of the rhymes seemed a bit forced and unnatural, but other than that i really liked this poem.

--Steph

Beautifully Written;
Rather sad though.
-Sad but true
Anyway
5/5
[xXx]

*The feeling it portrays is true
[Sorry I forgot to add that]
x

There is some very strong imagery in this one. I loved the 'bleeding mirrror' that is a wonderfully powerful image.
Real talent shines through in this.

Nice ending, bringing it all into perspective, good attempt at rhymin as well

-biscuit-

Good poem I liked it. it flowed pretty well better then your others.