Wow. This is so sad. You painted a very sad picture. I never know if these are fiction or not, but if its real... I am so very sorry. I hope you are comforted by your writing, and that it gives you some distraction even if just for a few moments. Keep up the writing!

This poem was OK, but could use a little work so it could be ace. I think you need to fix the format of the poem so it looks more like the seasoned poem. There are also a few things that ruin the flow of the poem, but I think that is alright. Another thing, the ending of the poem was a little weak. But that too with a little work could be really good. I think you need to correct your grammar and spelling mistakes.

Nice job...