The feeling of love

Hmmm... it really seemed like you were trying to make it rhyme a little to much... *that small as a mice???* don't worry about making it rhyme... just write what your thinking... don't force yourself to conform your writings to the style you've been taught is "poetry"... because poetry is whatever you want it to be... don't give up though... just have fun with it

I loved it, genious!

Just some suggestions, spelling need fixing. Well atleast add the other letter. But other then that it was pretty good.