Awww sad.
i think this poem needs better structure.
you had rhyme going in ther but the rhythm seemed a bit off.
4/5
was still quite good.
had a nice story to it.
~Emah

Wow this is so deep and heart touching i really reall liked no i LOVED it. it gave me goose bumps when i read it.
i havent read a poem like this for a while i mean one that i liked so much.

great great job really good work.

5/5

gemma in cheshire

Wow i felt a shiver as i read that you really put this out right, i hope this hasnt happend to you good job anyways

could you have a look at my poems plz thanx xxx alex xxx

Omg! this was fantastic!
i loved every word. it's so sad yet so so beautiful, in every way.

Remember the way you feel ripped in two?
that's because..this boy completed you.

those were my favorite lines. this poem was amazing. keep up the wonderful work!!
job well done.
5/5.

-Ashlei.