The reason I liked this poem was because you describe it in a way that people will feel as if you're talking to them. Your descriptions were more of a narrative and explained it as a person talking when it might have been deeper if you just described it without some of the direct narration. Maybe go into more emotional detail of the person the speaker is speaking to. But overall it was a good poem with some good meaning. 4.8/5

♥~4ever-N-ever~♥ --
Hey, remember me? Lol! Well, I had to give this poem a 4/5. If there is ONE THiNG that I really look for in poetry, it`s the spelling and grammar. You have a couple of mistakes ;; and that`s definitely a thumbs down for me. It seemed to flow alright. I would go through the poem carefully, make sure that you are using the right 'your'`s, and that everything makes sense. Because right now, it doesn`t. Overall, nice job, though! Good moral // theme.

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

Not too bad... Very true. Though I didn't like the flow of the poem at all.. It really took away from it. Sorry.

xDarkSuicidex 4.5

Keep it up! I could see a Joni Mitchell in you words yet

Wow..i can really relate on this 1......i think this 1 i liked the best cuz i can relate......a 10000/5 for me

5/5. Great poem! Awesome writing!