That was amazing and the structure and flow was great! i loved it and the ending was powerful as it should be..thx for ur comments,
love ya lots,
sore

Thiss is kindaa.. scary but its still good.
meghan♥

Wow this was deep. I really loved how you caught my attention at the beginning. That was excellent. 5/5
-Kakashi

Woweee. Another sad story. Well, poem. =P Tehe. This was great also. Flow was flawless, the rhymes were great, didn't seem forced at all to me. And all the emotions were great too. Excellent job! Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Wow that was amazing sad but great i really like this one!

Your so insightful! Its amazing great awsome job Billions of appluding hands.

I think you are a great poet, your work is beautiful.
i gave you a 5/5

kr!st!na

Very powerful... so emotional... definite 5/5... keep up the good work!

Wow. this is amazing!! it's so well written and makes such an impact ont he reader, i'm impressed!

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ANOTHER ONE THAT JUST AMAZES ME! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!

x3-------SHELBY

At first I thought this poem was going to be cheesy, the lines looked so robotically similar, but I was pleasantly surprised. You set up a very strong rhythm, and the repetition leaves a powerful effect. The way you wrote this poem felt a good bit like a story, telling me of an image that’s happening, or had happened, somewhere. You brought that image to me and I can’t help but see the pain as much as feel it in my mind… There wasn’t a chunky part anywhere in this poem, and I really am impressed. For a thirteen year old your profile description, this poem, and the comment you left me were written very maturely.

5/5 Congrats.

Great poem.... i love the way you used she all the time, it emphised the emotion more... great work keep it up

Once again, another amazing poem! i like all of your writing!

Wow.... this is like the best poem i have read. Its very sad but very nicely presented poem. I jus love it.

I really like this one i think its my fav

Thats really good. the rhythem is wonderful. deffanitely a 5/5

xo kisses xo

I really Like This Poem ! You Are Very Talented =)

Well try not to repeat 'she' many times xD coz it kinda messes up the flow.. well anyway this was an emotional piece, good job.

This again, like many of your poems, is short in length, but by no means lacking in emotion and immediate reaction. Very strong piece of writing, nice flow to it. I will invest more time into your poetry.

Well done

Best wishes

Through the first stanza it almost made me think that this poem was relating back to the stereotypical emo cutting poems that flood the sad/depressing genres on the site... (including a few of mine =( from way back...) But thankfully it had some meaning ;)

It is very sad and abuse is something many people have to deal with on a daily basis, not a lot know how horrid it can be sometimes, but in ways described in your poem, the vivid detail is enough to send shivers down a grown mans spine.

Great poem.
~Bryce