Your poems
have progressed
Greatly
throughout your time
Excellent Excellent
Piece of Work
Love your rhyme too
5/5
~MF~

I love it.... but (dont you hate when we put but) their are some spelling mistakes and uh other than that it was good

Keep it up!!

Awww! Thats so cute and sweet lissa! There is HEAPS of love in that! Sorry I haven't read lately, but I'm going to now!

Luv ya

Luv Niquee
xoxoxoxox

Pretty good - I like the emotions that drove your writing but the flow was a little off I have to agree with a couple of the others, it just felt a little weird trying to read it. But overall it was a good poem 4/5.

As Kirsten said the way you structured the stanzas has taken away from the poem a little. Try making each sentence it's own line and each stanza a statement on a separate subject to make everything fall into place.

The sentiment and feel of the piece, however, raises it off of the screen and gives it texture.

A nice read that needs a just a little tweaking to make it a really enjoyable one.

Wow this is powerfu stuff. it makes me think about stuff. nice

A another great poem by a great poet, you have done a great job here,
keep it up 5/5

Wow if only we all had someone like that....anyways that as great again 5/5
aunabeth