This was great! I loved how you described night as evil and scary and day as warm and safe.. The flow is good as are your descriptions.. I would change the title though, it was a little like.. scientific.. Maybe like "Day To Night" or "Day And Night" would be better, but thats just my opinion..

Evil is about to be met.
^ This line didn't sound quite right to me..

Will the fear finally end.
^ I think since the rest of the poem did rhyme, that this line should as well

Great write, very interesting! 5/5

Wow this is a great piece.
thank you for your post.
It is much appreciated.
5/5 for your talent
~emah

Wow i think i like the sunshine beter...it makes me wnt to get scared of the dark again......a 5/5 for me!!

Mmm very very nice... 4/5

Whoa- I liked this poem a lot and I know how it is to be there.
Where EVERYTHING is going right and Suddenly Everything goes wrong. IT sucks Alot. you have to keep your head up and know their is better times. Good luck

Rach

Wowie this was good toooo! i can relate to this..i get all...scared at night. lol. anyway, the detailing was amazing...great work. 5/5

I like this. =) very different to any poems i've read and remembered. =)

i'd go 4.5/5, but i'll round up to be nice. =D the flow is out on some stanzas. just say it aloud, or count ur syllables and it will be fine.

excellent creativity, thankyou for your wonderful comments on my poems. =)

keep writing,
xxx

This was a excellent write. It was very well done.