Comments : The Storm Shall Cleanse You Of All Sin

  • 13 years ago

    by Biscuit

    First stanza - towards is one word,
    fifth stanza - fury not furry!

    excellent rhyming, this poem is full of emotion and some great...are they metaphors?
    'A black eye for ignorance'...
    'A loose tooth for disrespect'
    whatever they are these lines caught my eye!

    -kim- xx

  • 13 years ago

    by xxxStarSxxx

    I loved this poem. it was kindo of long but the first line chought (sp?) my eye and I was attached to the whole thing till the end. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Moon Princess

    +.+ Well your dad's wrong. It was just an excuse to beat you up!! Saying that you had to be cleansed of ur evil!! Bullshit, more like he does!! I'm so sorry for what happened to you, and I really loved all the metaphors in this poem. I really hope that the storm never came again :(. Thanxs for the comment on my poem. Lol. I have trouble submitting poems, cuz I can't spell check cuz it will freeze. TaTa +.+

  • 13 years ago

    by :.Girly.:

    Thank you

  • 13 years ago

    by Kylead

    SO when are you gonna write your book?
    If you make one ill buy it

  • 12 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    Wow...the poem was soo meaningful, and when it is,i dont think flow and rhyme or anything else really matters...not to me anyway. im soo sorry you have to go through all of this...ther's points where i can relate, but your dad is wrong, no-one has done so much evil to deserve this. the metaphors were great. a beautiful poem.
    nuff love x

  • This was a great poem dont get me wrong but the rhyming didnt see to fit the mood of the poem and maybe it might of been better without the verses. but thats just my oppinion.

    loved it though was full of loads of emotion and i hope your ok

  • 11 years ago

    by SashaMirage

    That was really such a great poem... though I am very sorry that you had to go through all of that. Your dad is so horrible to have treated you that way. Anyway the flow of the poem was great. And it was very descriptive.
    Take Care ~sasha

  • 10 years ago

    by InfiniteChange

    Pff this was so intense. what an excellent writing and yet so sad and so unethical. you are who you are, you can never be perfect to everyone because everyone's perception is different and unique. Though, this of course is completely different. He was your dad. If he beats you up, then he is the one with mental problems, just remember that. 5/5 i think its simply sublime.

    xx Denise