Love at first sight

Your words make me feel so hopefull. its a simple love story but its so wonderful to read the words and play it vividly in your mind to the tune of your discription. :)

I love it
great write
very strong towards me
i can relate
great job!
keep it up:)

THiS WAS GOOD, GOOD JOB.

BTW;; WHEN YOU LEAVE A COMMENT TRY NOT TO MAKE ME FEEL BAD, WHEN YOU SAiD "MAKE iT RHYME, DON`T MAKE iT SEEM FORCED" WAS KiNDA MESSED UP, iT WASN`T FORCED, TRUST ME, THOSE POEMS TAKE A LOT OF TiME TO WRiTE, SO i`M SORRY iF i SOUND RUDE NOW BUT COULD YOU PLEASE JUST LEAVE HAPPY COMMENTS ON MY POEMS. i REALLY APPRECiATE THAT YOU WROTE iT WAS A GOOD POEM BUT NEXT TiME COULD YOU PLEASE MAKE THE NEGATiVE COMMENTS TO A MiNiMUM;; THANKS A BUNCH

-SHELBY-

Alright.. This was pretty good.. The flow was a little off, although you could fix this by trying to make all the lines the same length.. Also, try not to use the words "I, he, she, etc." so much.. Think of ways around using those and it will be a much better poem.. Also, maybe add some more detail into the poem and some more emotion.. Like how you felt when he picked up your books.. Anyways, nice job.. I liked the message.. 4/5

WOW;; THiS iS REALLY GOOD! YEAH;; AS A MATTER OF FACT THST iS TRUE. iT`S SAD BUT iT`S TRUE.

x3--------SHELBY