Comments : Want it to end

  • 17 years ago

    by Marissa

    I love your poem!
    I think that you have put alot of your emotions into it and that is really good!
    I hope that you keep on writting!
    I love your work!

  • 17 years ago

    by facedownindirt

    I thought that this was a fairly good poem. The only thing you should try to look out for is your grammer.

    For example:

    "you used me and you know it
    how could you do it to me
    when iv gone through so much
    & not even half of it you seen"

    Try this:

    "You used me and you know it
    how could you do it to me.
    When I'VE gone through so much
    AND not even half of it YOU'VE seen"

    Other than that you are a very talented writer. Fix thoes mistakes and you're amazing! = ]