THATS WHAT M TALKING ABT MAN, MUAH PERFECT 5/5

Nice poem...it goes well together...5-5

Some great emotions in here but the poem seems to revolve around the rhyming, rather than the rhyming being part of the poem...if tht makes sense??
wot i mean is the rhyming seems a bit forced.

i think u should concentrate more on writing ur feelings than trying to express urself in rhymes.

u will find that if u just write everything down (forgetting about trying to make it rhyme) the poem will come together by itself and it will flow a lot better.

hope it helps :) xx

Now that is what I call untamed released passion ....well done

Amazing 5/5....i think your poems written so well and it comes to ur heart coz it express how u feels...i believe u can write more..

You have done a really good job of these poems. A very good job!

Throughout the entire reading I had a smile of complete pleasure on my face. Nalley said it best "a release of untamed passion"

This is a very nice poem! you got thetalent in writting love poems! it had alot of emotion it in! keep it up!

Same girl? :-P Anyways, the imagery is very good. Nice job!

AWWWWW. Oh my gosh! That was soo good! It was certainly a delight reading your poetry! Lovely, simply lovely.

This was a very nice poem. But I think
you put to much focus on the rhyming.
Don't get me wrong the poem made
perfect sense and I think you have a
wonderful talent. I just think that you
should dig a little deeper and focus least on the rhymes. Just let the words
flow and you will have yourself a perfect
poem. Keep up the good work though
I'll be checking back with you from
time to time because I believe you
have wonderful talent. 5/5

Letty