I liked the story in it. sweet.. it was nice.
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Amz

W.O.W! I loved that sweetie.. If that is not your best work then I should really read some of your other poems.. This was sooo sadd.. Oh, lol, I just remembered that you wanted me to do an old one.. Oopsy, lol, okay, I'll go do one of those now.. Once again, amaziingg poem! 5/5

That was amazing and had heaps of emotion in it...and yes, i have found someone that i have fallen for...the poem u wrote really touched me and i have a friend whose father died a few years ago that im going to share this with...terrific job!
love ya lots,
sore

Very nice poem indeed, i ready enjoyed your this poem great meaning, great word choice.5/5

Very well organized poem. It was structured greatly, and came with a flawless flow. I enjoyed reading it's splendid content. Keep it up!

Omg...hun...this is wonderful! it completly drew me...i got detailed pictures in my mind of a girl holding a rose and trying to keep from crying...what made it even more beautiful and sad was the fact that she was at her father's grave...your poem gave me chills honestly...wonderfully written. keep up the good work.

Very nice. i like the use of words, it's got great descriptions.
i wanna thank you for all your comments, they really made me feel like i have some talent, thank you!
i'm looking forward to reading more, but for now, i'm off to school!

Excellent poem, Tammie! I really loved it! The rhyming, your words, the emotion...Everything was so awesome...! I cant understand why you think that wasnt one of your best poems, cause it was amazing! Keep writing!
Best wishes,

TILLmyLASTtearFALLS

Aww... gee. that was a purdy awesome poem. i loved it with a passion. my favorite stanza was:

"With the rose in its place
She stood tall and brave
Looking sadly below her
At her fathers grave"

^^ so beautiful!!!

5/5
-Allanah

Wow, This was actually really good! Nice imagery in there, your flow was great. And it was jam packed with emotions. Awesome job in my opinion! Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

The Ausie gals are ouot with a kill if i may say. This is beautiful. I love Crimson, have a poem about that too.

Such mysteries on those words that perfectly match the emotions of the poem..

God Bless!

OMG so sad =( You are a very good writer, this was a very moving poem hun. 5/5

This poem is amazing. you are a good writer. keep it up
good job

Tammie,

Please... Pleaasee..... use Punctuation.

First of all, Tammie I see that you have quoted you wrote this poem under special circumstances. Please do not be upset that I do not empathize with your sitaution while commenting. Please remember that I only comment on your poem; I do it without any pre-notions.

I feel this is better than the "Bleeding Mascara". The title is not too odd but it isn't wonderful title. I say so not beacaus of the words "Crimson Rose", but through out the poem you have referred to the rose but you have not mentioned anywhere what the rose signifies. It is a character taht occupies the center stage and does teh dancing but we readers ahve no idea whether it's a clown or a villan or the hero. Describing the rose, relating ti the sadness or grief the gril feels and fianlly lets go enough to continue with life would have made the title meaningful.

Flow is good, better than the MAscara poem again. Simple words keep the poem light and so does not make it heavy. Nice job in weaving those simple words together to suit what you want o say. Rhyming is ok, but can be improved. Concept too is ok; vison needs a bit of work, or if you have experienced the situation first hand put more feelings into it.

As a drop of blood falls
So does a tear

I dunno why, but I loved those two lines.

Remembering the memories
Reminiscing the past
Wishing the end never came
And forever actually lasts

The above stanza should have been phrased better.

That's all I can say.

I liked this one, the title actually was pretty good, it really caught my eye, you are very talented.
much love, Tara-Kay

The intensity that this piece ends with is astonishing! the start had he interesting and the way you finished....so sad ='( ive lost many friends close to me and been in those situations.. still 5/5 i love sad / dark poems and you can definately carry them through! =)