This was different to what I expected, but I liked it. Even though it's short, it's got a good message and meaning behind it which really makes the reader think. Awesome job! Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Its more of questions wanting to be answered than anything else..if you added some more lines..
..maybe take a shot at answering some of theese mystery questions then it might be worth reading again and might be worthy of being called apoem..

..i really think your on to something though so keep it up.

october xx

Very thought provoking