This was okay.. I felt the repitition didn't really work and the descripitons were somewhat lacking.. But you can work on that.. Keep writing 4/5

That was a good poem, Great job!

Wow-excellent poem.....very meaningful, you totally show your emotions.

october xx

Wow-excellent poem.....very meaningful, you totally show your emotions.

october xx

Seems like a great venting poem

The poem was more of a venting poem. It lacked clear descriptions and the repeating parts were off but the language was strong and the meaning was there.