This is really amazing...I doubt I could pull a poem like this off...we have very different styles but your work is beautiful and I wish I could write like this sometimes. I really loved it, Grea job.
5.5
Breanna

I enjoyed reading it, *hugs* keep it up... 5/5 thx for your comment ^_^

Thanks for the comment, this is a good poem i like it, keep it up

5 stanzas
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B

Rhyming couplet. Old fashioned, yet not too common. You ended in a triple lined stanza, with no static rhyme scheme, unlike the poem.
A
B
A

Interesting. Maybe, the length, could be a problem, if I am looking for a trancey poem, but this poem is a good write..

This is a pretty short/simple and yet so meaningful poem...great write indeed

all the best and take care

Great flow with your rhymes, an excellent dark poem. Nicely Done ~~ Christina

I Seriously do not want to want to be the one to piss u off. Flow and rhythm is in your system. Good work.

Hey.. thank you for the comment. I really like your poem too! It has good rhythm! keep it up! =)

Amanda Faye K

Hey,
This is a great poem, I couldn't make one like this if I tried my best! I just wish I can understand the poem the way you see it through your eyes. Cause everyone thinks things differently. Keep writing poems there great
Sach

Thanx 4 commenting on my poem!!!
made me feel a lot better about putting that one on. thought it may have been a bit too personal. have you read my others???
your a great writer too!!!

Hey,
I really liked that.. it was great... i added you to my favorites.. keep up the good work! o yah gave you a 5/5

*Rhiannon*

Nice
love your poems

Wow. This is another amazing poem.
Your an amazing poet. Keep up the good work!
5/5!

Very nice wourk. I especially liked this couplet:

"Standing there, a perfect frown
Upon the world she looks down"

It has a great rythme to it.