Ah this poem deserves more than 1.
The emotions/thoughts are there in the poem, I think you just have to sharpen it into words that rings the feel of the poem.Nah I think its better your way.Good Work!

Keep on writing on what u feel and like tammie..
5/5
God Bless!

Good poem 5/5

That poem didn't deserve a 1. good work. i really did like it. i normally don't like long poems, but i did like this.
i feel dumb, but what is an arostic?

I love Acrostic poems, its such a challenge, wonderful job I gave you a 5/5 =]

Good job for your first Acrostic. I didn't think it flowed very well in places though. Just possibly take out a few words here and there and it might work out better.

I liked it though! I thought the depression was great to have for the word 'Apathetic.' Great write. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Oh! I get it! haha, awesome. i might write one of these...

This is a great write.....I have no friggin clue what an Acrostic is. Sorry, lol. But this is wonderful. So mysterious. 5/5

UGGGHHH! I get it now. lol. i was wondering how pauline suddenly *got it* I'm a blond brunette, what can I say. lol. It says Apathetic down the side. lol.
*Slooooooow*

UGGGHHH! I get it now. lol. i was wondering how pauline suddenly *got it* I'm a blond brunette, what can I say. lol. It says Apathetic down the side. lol.
*Slooooooow*

Great poem. This is the best acrostic I've read on this site. Wonderful poem. I really liked this. So deep and full of emotion.

For this bein your first Acrostic poem, love it is amazing. VEry nicely done. Rather sad actually, I loved it though.

Nice poem, very well written and full of true emotions, 5/5 from me.
keep up the great job

This was an amazing acrostic. I find it hard writing them usualy. But you nailed this one perfectly. It was so sad though, Hope none of this is based on true events. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

This is very well written. I didn't even realize it was an acrostic until I got done reading it and read your little note on the bottom... which pretty much means you did an amazing job on it, it wasn't all chopped up and didn't sound like you were just putting words together to form the acrostic. And the poem in itself was very sad, but very well written. Great job on this! 5/5

THis is a great peice... I often dis-like Acrostics, finding them very forced and rough, but this peice had none of these problems flowing well throughout with good progression

5/5

O god da 1st 3 lines remind me of my ex-bf!...dat was how he was...lol...ne wayz i really liked dis 1ne...i have/see no problems with it...5/5

Another nice poem!
soooo sad :(
cant imagine what her dad did...
keep it up!

For ur first acrostic that was fantastic! I cud neva rite lyk that! well done!!