True it's short, but you completed a whole story and sensation some longer poems couldn't do. Great use of words. I liked how you started the lines. Thanks for reading my poem.

And in her eyes I see the fear
I've covered up and felt for years

^^ OMG..I cant even explain how much I loved these lines Sar, I mean whoa..I want to say so much about them but can't find the words!

Secondly, don't ever apologize to your readers on how short a poem is or how there isn't enough emotion, You need to write for you, write out the feelings your feeling in that moment..I thought it was a great piece from you..it showed your hurt for this person whose going through something you obviously went through yourself! That sympathy in itself is beautiful just knowing your a caring person!
Great write Sarah!
Chelsey

It was so good!! Wow. Poems don't need to be long. Your poem was short and it was beautiful if it was any longer you woulda took away something from it. There was alot of emotion in there. just because you didn't write about here crying or something. It was soo good i loved it so much.

Very sad. Im sorry it's true.
Much love always.
Amberinaa*

Idk what ur talking about.......there is a heck of a lot of emotion in that poem hunny!!!! seriously! great job!! it was awesome!!!
Amanda

That was a very good poem Sarah. Sad, and very realiztic. I'm sure there are a lot of people who can relate to this one.

PS. All guys are bad :)

So sad! Nice rhymes and a good flow, great job on this one... The ending was perfect!

Couldn't portray strong emotions?? This was amazing. I'm sorry for what you're going through but you really have a way to express what you feel. Stay strong!!

God bless

Oh wow this is so sad but it's really good. amazing job. great flow, good rhymes...good job

This poem is so wonderfully intense! I love that you've poured yourself into it & put urself out there like that. I dont think the apology at the end is neccessary @ all! This poem is so moving & the length is perect. Not @ all incomplete

Wow that poem gave me goosebumps. I can relate to it.

~Katie~

Omg its awsome i like ur poetry it unleashes tru meanings and its not poser poetry

This is brilliant- and its feeling of being incomplete only adds to this.. xx

Simply beautiful. tis poem does protrays stron emotions. i luv it.
*5/5*

take care

Gr8 poem...small but got strong emotions. u should continue it:)

Amazing poem.... I know the feelings. And, I agree- it's so hard to write about those situations.. It hurts too much.
5/5 for sure
Congrats on making it that far- you're work is incredible.