This is a very dark, and wonderful
poem. I think you should have put
it under the dark,fantasy catagory
though. Besides that I think you
are an excellent writer. You have a
wonderful way with words and a
superb imagination. I was held
captive by your words. Keep up the
great work.5/5

Letty

Wow, i really like this poem, it's dark and words just absorb you into the poem and creates it's own world for a while.
The flow's good and the rhyming is spot on.
Great job gorgeous

President

Um...is this directed at me?
cause if it is tlak to me!
lol.
it was a great poem and yea im back on the net and im back at home again.
:)

It's not about anyone, emma. Lol. it's about Society pulling itself apart. like performing an abortion upon urself, it is destroying the goodness inside out. it's about the lack of innocence

Wow......u have such a way with words and it's so true about society.
i love it. keep it up and soon you'll be swimming in hundred dollar bills.

cya around snoo

tim

This one reminds me of something i wrote but havnt put up yet its soo good! i luv it haha keep writing and if u can, im not sure if u can havnt used this site for long, but if u can send me a few of the ones uv written i luv reading ur stuff :D

Wonderfully written. The honesty within the poem leaves a huge impact on the reader and definitely leaves them with something to think about. I really liked this piece. You seemed to capture everything that the world is going through and write it down so beautifully and truthfully. The flow was really good too and held up very well, as did the rhyming. Great job on this! 5/5

Wow this is an excellent poem, and every word you wrote down is so true, things just keep getting worse and worse, excellent write 5/5

Wow, I LOVED this. It really shows what the world is like today, and it is sad. Absolutely beautiful, great work darling.

--steph

Hmm...I didn't know exactly what you were getting at for this one, but again, it reminded me of war and people fighting. It mainly gave me the idea that we have everything, but not everything that we have is good and we strive to make it perfect. That's just what I got out of it. =P

The flow was good for the most part. I really liked the flow to the first stanza, but then it started to get choppy and didn't flow much after that. But I still liked it. =P Great write. 5/5 xoxo

Samantha