I love it.

Hey, well done, its def better than mine! great job, love mel

This was so sad.
I liked the imagery and I thought the wording and flow were good.
I think it should go in dark because of the type of imagery you used, but apart from that, excellent!

Wow deep but i like it a lot =]. keep it up!! =]

Wow very powerful writing. Keep it up, you have a way with passion, I like it.
Always-
Shattered and Broken