Luanne, what a brilliant poem, the message is something that all young girls and boys should be taught. There are too many people rushing into things because they think it will last forever.

I loved the last stanza, I thought it really closed the poem perfectly, well done Luanne, a brilliant write.

Luanne,
this was beautiful poem, lovely yet very inspiration penned.....oh my, i liked this verse; its something beautiful inside... well done!
depression a place the sun does not shine
left in the darkness, where sadness will dine
love is not always what it appears to be
first loves don't always come, with a guarantee
.........................for life............................

wish you have a great day, take care, bert ~

Beautifully written my friend. Love does not come with a users manual (well, okay the Kama Sutra comes close). First love, second love....no love comes with a guarantee and as the J. Geils Band says: Love Stinks. But, when it is right, there is nothing better, even if it burns out and fades away.

My word, Luanne. This is such a chilling piece. It could've easily been categorized in the dark section.
You have created a diverse piece of art. Just wow! Keep it up~Holly

Wow Luanne! This was such an incredible write, I love it! It was absolutely stunning the way you captured the true essence of teenage years. The whole way reading, I was thinking of myself. Wonderful poem. I admire your brilliance and talent.

Wow this write was so powerful.

You had me attention right from the start:

The crow claws holes at virgin eyes
marking their spot of deceitful lies
young girl in love, to blinded to see
love is not aways what it appears to be

Your flow was flawless and your words of of wisdom!

Wonderfully done. I'm with Holly, this could have easily fit in the Dark poetry section.

Couldn't get more truer than this. The flow was without flaw and the message was great.

The imagery... WOW. Couldn't find one thing to critisize about this. From the first line to the last you held my attention.

Great write.

Happiness
Jeannie

It was the greatest...it speaks for the reality and not just an ideal thing in life....GREAT JOB, AWESOME even how your imagination works it flows swiftly soft like velvet run through a skin....KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK

Whoaa . Well done . This was awesome, hun`.
Keep it comin` .
..ღ__MiNDYY

I Love this poem so much.. I don't have many poems yet.. been really busy trying to write them. but I love so much!!!

Wow. really really really really really goooood poem!! I LOVE IT!. its gives such a great example y we should wait before we give oruselves to another man. great poem 5/5 xoxoxo -jennifer

Wow. really really really really really goooood poem!! I LOVE IT!. its gives such a great example y we should wait before we give oruselves to another man. great poem 5/5 xoxoxo -jennifer

Another beautiful write. Your amazing Luanne. I don't think that I can think of any other way to comment you . 5/5

Love
Letty

Truth at it best! great choice of words. I loved every line!

Luanne this poem is amazing! Your word choices and flow is great. The feelings of the broken heart of first love Wow!

darkness comes, hiding from the past
adolescent life, falling apart so fast
digging a grave, slipping into the hole
tears overcome her body and soul

This pom really gets you right in the heart.
Take Care Cindy