Comments : If I Were Born Beautiful...

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    How very true! People are to busy looking on the outside of a person. The inside is where all the beauty is found! Good luck with your writing.

  • 17 years ago

    by ALEX

    I LOVE THIS. you are amazing. to put down on paper something so many people feel in such an original way.. i am stunned. 'i want to look "TV"'

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I loved this!
    It was so beautiful, yet so full of pain.
    My favourite part was the last stanza.
    I think you did an excellent job on this.

  • 17 years ago

    by NOTHINGBUTALIE

    'Don't Judge A Book By Its Cover'
    But then again,
    'Everyone's Insides Are All The Same'

    ..Great poem! >_< Mines nothing compared to you!

    (Hello, Im Gabby! Nive to meet you! >.>)

  • 17 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    People are to busy looking on the outside of a person. The inside is where all the beauty is found! To put down on paper something so many people feel inside in such an original way is outstanding, you are an amazing poet and I do need to read more of your stuff, now for me this poem is good, not great but it could be. I think this poem needs to be a little bit longer maybe a stanza or two and add in there more true emotion, I think this emotion is tapered with, maybe the poem is over worked. The flow is good though and the wording all right, I mean I don’t have much room to talk correcting you’re my suck compared to this.

    ”i wish i weren't for radio
    i want to look "TV"
    cause if i was born beautiful
    then people would love me”

    this stanza stands out the most and makes a great closing, this is truly how very many people feel, and you put it all in words many cannot say, which makes your poetry stand out. and another thing there is a spelling error in the first stanza

    “All the people on TV
    look much more beautiful thanme”

    Should be

    “All the people on TV
    look much more beautiful than me”

    Now that I’ve written you a book and ran my self out of words I will let you go about counting all these words that is after I go and rate this poem,

    nessa

  • 17 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    Excuse the errors that is my comp

  • 16 years ago

    by Anonymous Angel

    Hey,
    this poem is so true, everyone wants to be someone else who looks more beautiful than they self are!
    great poem, i enjoyed reading this poem..5/5
    kisses stephanie

  • 16 years ago

    by BECLiKEW0AHH

    Excellent.
    I think everyone experiences the feeling of imperfection, & wanting to be some one who is maybe more 'beautiful'. Its a horrible feeling, But you expressed it without ease.

    Typo in the second line.
    'look much more beautiful thanme'.

    Thanks for the comment.
    Rebecca.

  • 16 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    You're not ugly. :) But I like the actual poem, I think a lot of people can relate it to themselves, and it describes the jealousy people feel for models and movie stars perfectly. You should go through and edit your mechanics, and "thanme" should be "Than me" in the first stanza. Overall, I thought this was a very nice poem, with a good flow, and a proper title. Great work.

  • 16 years ago

    by XxbekkaxX

    I know what its like to want to look different...but to want to look fake?to want to look like all thoes people on tv that have no life, just fame? they dont love, and people dont love them, they are fans, they cant make you feel better. looking beautiful is different then being beautiful. but thanks for the comment,cant wait to read more of your poems.

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    Ok the flow again in this was great and the emotion was astonishing well it was good for my tastes I read the above comments and Park has it on the head. The piece as a whole was done well your message was great and clear. Think some people dont tell you what you should here but that happens at times you should look at my comments some time lol. oh well this is the second poem I read. Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by X Kashies Misery X

    Yeah i agree, but dude everyone thinks they are ugly!!
    >_<! and tv people are fake and make upd all over but yeh i agree
    I wish I was beautfiul, even if people tell me i am, i still dont feel it and most of the time i cant feel it, im so ugly and mean to myself, i hate myself....
    but thats sucky life for you...
    anyway ye good poem

  • 16 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    This poem is amazing.. each stanza is soo great .. it flows flawlessly and soo many people can definitely relate to this .. and people probably ask themselves these same questions every single day.. excellent write .. i love the way you wrote it.. great job.. keep it up =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Monica AKA Mika

    OMG i think everyone can relate to this poem, i love it.. i mean it tells exactly how people fell including myself! This is great..5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kitty kat

    I love u and i think ur beautiful!! but u are right what u say is ture