Comments : Conversation of a suicide and a friend

  • 17 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Really depressing, deep and emotional, shows true care for a friend. well done
    xxxx

  • 17 years ago

    by sweetiepie18

    This was so powerful, really moving. keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Kristina

    Awww wow this is a very good poem; its sad, but the way you wrote it talking to your friend was really good. 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Wow! Its such a powerful poem. Very deep. I really like it! It is really moving. Keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Kalgalath

    Good poem. for what it is.

  • 17 years ago

    by Bret Higgins

    This is an interesting commentary on life, social reasoning and selfishness.

    The rhyme is consistent and the flow even (whilst punctuation would help, the lack of it isn't doing that much damage due to meter).

    Of the three you requested to be read, this is your strongest.

    Bret

  • 17 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Interesting at the least.
    I thought the idea was sweet and cute in a emotional way. More describing words might brighten it up a bit and make the flow easier to read but twas a good poem all in all =)

  • 17 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Very nice choice of words to use. And you just get to your point. Very well written. 5/5

    Taylor

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Wow...i really liked this, it was so sad and moving and the flow was perfect and the last line really stood out. Well done.

  • 17 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    AWWWW I love this poem! You are a great writer! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by TeAr dROp

    Wow i like it keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Hannah Emellia

    Oh geez... That's so pretty and sweet!! Very nice indeed. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by TeAr dROp

    I like it...i really do...when reading it i have picture it in my mine!!!! keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by amoxi

    This poem was very well written and it had a lot of emotion, im confused about the end tho, did she tell her friend to kill herself too so they will still be together? anyway it was a very good poem 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    Really interesting idea,this was really different especially

    You leave me with nothing to do
    I'm not going to live without you
    We can leave this world together
    Lie in eternal peace forever

    that stanza i liked your flow and liked your stories
    Keep writing honey
    Take care of yourself
    See ya
    Laura

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Beautifully depressing lol. Some parts seemed to lack the flow the rest of poem held. I think if you spiced up your vocab a little, this could be a really great poem. Good read. 5/5

    marcella

  • 16 years ago

    by ragrag

    I love it!

  • 16 years ago

    by Zara Baines

    VERY GOOD, WELL WRITTEN