This poem was well written, however; I felt the lines were a little long here and there, try and shorten them up maybe. Overall great Poem.

Peace, Joe

Cute poem.. i like it a lot... again great imagery.. however.. somelines are a little too long and dont really flow.. you may wanna change that.. but other than that ... i really enjoyd reading this poem! :P

Some lines seem to long and out of sync, but overall this was a really good read. 5/5

marcella

A really great poem.. great word choice... the flow was a little off in places.. but the message was strong.. my favorite so far

Okay I think the poem was amazing. But one little thing, it had She then it just all of the suddenly changed to `I` and then back to she. I think it would make sense if you kept it 'she' then in the end somehow say `And that was me.` I dunno. It's your poem so yeah. Great write other thn that. 5/5

Nice poem amazing rite

This poem was magnificent i loved it it had so much emotion i was drawn in from beginning to end i loved it 5/5